How is space used in the composition? (filling the space:concept of Positive/Negative explored. Techniques which may create the illusion of space(which techniques)? How were elements of space used to optimum effect in composition? If space was not effective give reasons.
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Hi Alma,
You use the sky/water as the negative space and focus on what’s in/on the water. The penguin, flamingos and the man on the jet ski definitely stand out and are the main focus of the piece. The positioning of the penguin, man and flamingos create depth (and I’m not sure if that’s what you had intended or not); however, I think it would be a bit more effective if the larger image was closer or lower to the viewer or the smaller images further away. Objects that are closer and or lower are usually perceived to be larger. The flamingos do look a bit larger than the man, but the penguin, which is the furthest away, is larger than both the flamingos and the man. I’m not sure, but I believe the lighter blue lines are the trail of waves created by the jet skis. If that were also positioned in a way that was spread a bit more fluidly through the water, taking advantage of the effects of positive and negative space, it would emphasize and help balance the whole image. Overall, you did a good job on your project. Keep up with the good work!
Question 4 – Personal Perspective – Concept–Alma
How effectively was the concept of “transportation” explored? Do you think that this student successfully communicated transportation as the main idea of the composition; if not what do you think the main concept is?
I do not know what the main concept of the image is.
Some possibilities:
“You never know what you will encounter when you jetski.”
“Giant penguin or orca meets or eats man?”
The giant penguin or orca confuses the viewer as to what the main concept of the image actually is.
If you are going to use a giant penguin or orca, then it seems to me you need some text or copy to clarify the point or concept trying to be conveyed by the image.
How is line used in the composition? Contour, types of line, emotion or texture effectively used (describe where and how within the composition).
How were elements of line used to optimum effect in composition? If line was not effective give reasons.
Line is used within the composition to show the movement that the Jet Ski is making through the water. The line allows to give a two-dimensional work the ability to convey a three dimensional movement. The lines have a hatching technique, which gives a sense of speed in the water. I prefer the hatching technique here, because it gives off a sense of fast acceleration instead of a straight line which would make the jet skier appear to just be gliding through the water instead of hoping along on top of it. All in all, I believe this to be an eye opening piece on the way different objects and animals move through water.
How is shape used in the composition? 2-d, 3-d, grouping of shapes, etc. How were elements of shape used to optimum effect in composition? If shape was not effective give reasons.
I think she used shape well in this image because there is things in her image that are eye catching objects. For instance, the giant bird or sea creature is rising out of the water however, she gives us only a portion of its body causing me to wonder how big is it. There isn’t much dimension in the image besides the force behind the jet ski, however I like that you add the force because it brings out creativity to your image. The grouping of the shapes was the elements used to bring out the composition in the image. The way she grouped the objects brought unity to the image. I think the shape was effective but she could have used a little more detail. Overall, good job!
Question 5 – Personal Perspective – Quality
What do you think of the quality of the design and composition? Do you believe the composition was well thought out, reasons? Were the elements of space, line and shape effectively used (yes and no not acceptable answers)?
I’m not sure that the composition of the shapes compliments transportation. I do see an oceanic theme, but I dont feel that the shapes are propotionate to one another, which makes them a little confusing. I believe the space as a whole is used very well, with the sky and the water complimenting each other nicely. Line was also used effectively as shown by the clouds in the sky, and the faint horizon in the distance. I think that the penguin and the flamingos distract from the piece as a whole, and the composition would have been more effective by replacing them with maybe more jet skiers? Overall, I do see that the artist did incorporate line shape and space into the piece.
vipham said,
September 29, 2009 at 5:07 am
Question 1 – Space
How is space used in the composition? (filling the space:concept of Positive/Negative explored. Techniques which may create the illusion of space(which techniques)? How were elements of space used to optimum effect in composition? If space was not effective give reasons.
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Hi Alma,
You use the sky/water as the negative space and focus on what’s in/on the water. The penguin, flamingos and the man on the jet ski definitely stand out and are the main focus of the piece. The positioning of the penguin, man and flamingos create depth (and I’m not sure if that’s what you had intended or not); however, I think it would be a bit more effective if the larger image was closer or lower to the viewer or the smaller images further away. Objects that are closer and or lower are usually perceived to be larger. The flamingos do look a bit larger than the man, but the penguin, which is the furthest away, is larger than both the flamingos and the man. I’m not sure, but I believe the lighter blue lines are the trail of waves created by the jet skis. If that were also positioned in a way that was spread a bit more fluidly through the water, taking advantage of the effects of positive and negative space, it would emphasize and help balance the whole image. Overall, you did a good job on your project. Keep up with the good work!
-Vivi Pham
Raymond said,
September 29, 2009 at 4:13 pm
Question 4 – Personal Perspective – Concept–Alma
How effectively was the concept of “transportation” explored? Do you think that this student successfully communicated transportation as the main idea of the composition; if not what do you think the main concept is?
I do not know what the main concept of the image is.
Some possibilities:
“You never know what you will encounter when you jetski.”
“Giant penguin or orca meets or eats man?”
The giant penguin or orca confuses the viewer as to what the main concept of the image actually is.
If you are going to use a giant penguin or orca, then it seems to me you need some text or copy to clarify the point or concept trying to be conveyed by the image.
Is this the Emperor Penguin:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Emperor_Penguin_Manchot_empereur.jpg
Or is this a killer whale or orca?
Suggest you add a link below the image to a larger image on the student server.
The image of the jetski and the sharp turn works with the water and penguin image.
However, the wave breaking on the shore looks totally fake.
I do not know what those two orange things are on either side towards the bottom of the image–gold fish?
I need to see a bigger image on the student server to fairly evaluate the image.
Raymond
stephaniebubel said,
September 29, 2009 at 9:54 pm
Question 2 – Line- Alma
How is line used in the composition? Contour, types of line, emotion or texture effectively used (describe where and how within the composition).
How were elements of line used to optimum effect in composition? If line was not effective give reasons.
Line is used within the composition to show the movement that the Jet Ski is making through the water. The line allows to give a two-dimensional work the ability to convey a three dimensional movement. The lines have a hatching technique, which gives a sense of speed in the water. I prefer the hatching technique here, because it gives off a sense of fast acceleration instead of a straight line which would make the jet skier appear to just be gliding through the water instead of hoping along on top of it. All in all, I believe this to be an eye opening piece on the way different objects and animals move through water.
rjgriffin said,
September 30, 2009 at 10:44 pm
How is shape used in the composition? 2-d, 3-d, grouping of shapes, etc. How were elements of shape used to optimum effect in composition? If shape was not effective give reasons.
I think she used shape well in this image because there is things in her image that are eye catching objects. For instance, the giant bird or sea creature is rising out of the water however, she gives us only a portion of its body causing me to wonder how big is it. There isn’t much dimension in the image besides the force behind the jet ski, however I like that you add the force because it brings out creativity to your image. The grouping of the shapes was the elements used to bring out the composition in the image. The way she grouped the objects brought unity to the image. I think the shape was effective but she could have used a little more detail. Overall, good job!
RJ
rocks2002 said,
October 1, 2009 at 4:16 am
Question 5 – Personal Perspective – Quality
What do you think of the quality of the design and composition? Do you believe the composition was well thought out, reasons? Were the elements of space, line and shape effectively used (yes and no not acceptable answers)?
I’m not sure that the composition of the shapes compliments transportation. I do see an oceanic theme, but I dont feel that the shapes are propotionate to one another, which makes them a little confusing. I believe the space as a whole is used very well, with the sky and the water complimenting each other nicely. Line was also used effectively as shown by the clouds in the sky, and the faint horizon in the distance. I think that the penguin and the flamingos distract from the piece as a whole, and the composition would have been more effective by replacing them with maybe more jet skiers? Overall, I do see that the artist did incorporate line shape and space into the piece.
Racquel